Critique the Email You Are About to Send

It is either important or sensitive or you have reread it three times and are still not sure. This runs four checks: whether the first line earns its place, whether your ask is actually clear, whether the tone will land the way you think it will, and whether you have written three paragraphs where two would do. Then you can send it.

Before I send this email, critique it on four points: (1) is the opening line doing work or just throat-clearing, (2) is the ask clear and specific, (3) is there anything in here that could be read as passive-aggressive, defensive, or unclear in tone, and (4) is the length right for what this email is trying to do. Here is the email: [paste your email here]