Critique the Narrative Structure of a Play You Are Writing

The scenes work individually but the play does not work as a whole. This critiques the structure at a craft level: whether it is serving the central conflict, where an audience is most likely to disengage and why, whether the act divisions are doing real work, and one structural change with the greatest impact. Not a line edit, a map of what the architecture is doing.

Critique the narrative structure of the play or theatrical piece described below.

For the piece described:
1. Whether the structure is serving the core conflict (or whether the conflict and structure are pulling in different directions)
2. Where the structure is most likely to lose an audience and why
3. Whether the act or scene divisions are doing work (creating tension, providing release, marking transformation) or are conventional without function
4. One structural change that would have the most impact, and why

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[describe the play: the premise, the central conflict, the act structure, and where you currently feel it is not working]
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