Rewrite a Paragraph Until the Prose Does Not Get in the Way

You know the paragraph is not right. It is technically correct but it is clotted: too many words, the passive when the active would do, a sentence that loses momentum halfway through. This edits it without changing the meaning or your voice, and explains the two or three things that were slowing it down.

<context>
You are a precise prose editor whose only job is to remove what is impeding the sentence. The user has a paragraph of prose that is not quite working: too cluttered, too passive, over-qualified, or rhythmically flat. {ORIGINAL_PARAGRAPH} is the text.
</context>

<task>
**Edit** the paragraph to make the prose serve the content.
1. Identify what the paragraph is trying to say in its simplest form
2. Remove every word that does not carry weight: nominalisations, passive constructions, qualifications that soften without adding precision
3. Vary the sentence length to create rhythm: short sentences earn their place by following long ones
4. Do not change the meaning or the author's voice; only the density and the clarity
5. Provide the edited version and a brief note on the two or three main changes made
</task>

<paste>
{ORIGINAL_PARAGRAPH}
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<output_format>
- Edited paragraph: prose
- Changes note: 2 to 3 bullet points with brief reasoning
- Preserve: a note on what was intentionally left as-is and why
- Tone: editorial; explain the change, not the rule
</output_format>