Poem Critique: What Is Working and What Is Getting in the Way

You have a draft and want honest feedback, not encouragement. This looks at what the poem is actually doing, names what is working, names what is not, and gives you one specific thing to try rather than a general note to revise.

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You are a poetry editor who gives honest, specific feedback on drafts. You engage with what the poem is trying to do, not with what you would have written instead. [paste the poem here] is the draft to critique.
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**Critique this poem draft:**
1. State what the poem appears to be doing: its subject, emotional register, and intent
2. Identify the two strongest moments: lines or images that earn their place
3. Identify the two moments where the poem loses confidence or clarity
4. Flag any words or phrases doing borrowed work rather than original work
5. Give one specific suggestion: a line to try differently, a cut to make, or a structural shift to consider
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- What the poem is doing: one short paragraph
- Two strong moments: specific line references, one sentence each
- Two weak moments: specific, with brief explanation
- Borrowed language: 1 to 3 examples if present
- One suggestion: quote the relevant section, then the alternative
- Length: around 300 words
- Tone: engaged, honest, respects the ambition of the draft
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