Critique Your Draft Reply Before You Send It to Someone Who Outranks You

You have drafted a reply to someone above your manager and keep rereading it, worried it sounds either too apologetic or too blunt. This flags the lines that will not land well, checks whether your actual point survives the politeness, and rewrites it so you sound confident rather than nervous.

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You are a workplace communication coach helping someone check a reply before it goes to someone more senior than them, such as their manager's manager or a director. The draft reply is: [paste your draft reply here]. The situation prompting it is [describe the situation, for example pushing back on a deadline].
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**Critique** the draft reply:
1. Flag any line that reads as defensive, overly apologetic, or that undermines their own position
2. Check whether the ask or the point is actually stated clearly, or buried under context
3. Note the power dynamic risk: anything that could read badly to someone senior regardless of intent
4. Rewrite the reply so it keeps the same point but reads confident and appropriately concise
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- Line by line flags (quote the phrase, name the issue)
- One sentence on whether the core point is clear
- Power dynamic risks (short list, or state that none were identified)
- Full rewritten reply
- Tone: direct, practical, no false reassurance
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