Critique the Opening Line of Your Story

You have written the same opening sentence six different ways and none of the versions feel obviously better than the others. This checks whether the line is actually earning the reader's attention or just quietly describing the setting, and tells you plainly whether it is overworked, underpowered, or about right for an opening line.

Look at this opening line: {OPENING_LINE} from a story about {STORY_PREMISE}. Critique whether it earns the reader's attention or just describes the setting, and say plainly if it is doing too much work, too little, or roughly the right amount for an opening line.