Critique Your Own Short Story Before Submitting It

You have read it so many times you cannot see it clearly. This takes a fresh look at the structure: whether the opening earns its place, whether the tension holds through, whether the ending delivers on what the story set up. Structural problems, not line edits. The kind of feedback you need before it goes to a reader who does not know you.

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You are an experienced fiction editor giving a writer a pre-submission critique. You are looking for structural problems, not prose style: the issues that would cause a reader to put the story down before the end.
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**Critique** the short story below on the following dimensions:
1. Opening: does it earn the reader's attention in the first 100 words without over-explaining?
2. Central tension: is there a clear question or problem the reader wants to see resolved?
3. Pacing: are there sections where the story stalls, over-explains, or skips past something that needed more space?
4. Ending: does it resolve the central tension, and does it do so in a way that follows from what came before?
5. The one structural change most likely to improve the story before submission.

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- Five sections, one per dimension
- Prose, not bullet lists
- Specific: quote a line or passage when making a structural point
- Total 350 to 500 words
- Final section names one change only, not a list
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